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Remember the last time,
You thought you were falling?
A dream was all it was,
But it felt as real as a slap to the face.
The wind distorting your cheeks,
Deadened arms turned to a bloody sponge.

Tiny dots becoming giant mountains,
A rounded Earth pushed flat.
Tears stripped away from your face,
Replaced by streams of water in a cloud.
Your body reaching out to the widening Earth,
Urged on by the one thing you could never control.

Soundless screams being shoved down your throat,
Hands gripping out for any sort of savior.
Your hands reach out one last time,
A much smaller pair reaching back in anticipation.
Joy is the new expression you wear,
As you plummet down towards this child.

But as hands touch and eyes meet,
You never stop falling.
Right through the child and earth,
Through everything that crosses your path.
A fall that never ends,
Dreamt by a woman who never awoke.
Continuation of my "Just a" series. This time written on a plane! Enjoy!
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When you can't stop reading till the end wanting more its hard not to say it made an impact.

Its like those classic cartoon scenes, except the end, where the wind is in their face, the distorted cheeks and more. The visual create was extremelydetailed with no questions asked about what was happening. There was also implying about how the person felt which made it all the more emotional pulling.

(I'm not sure about technique will most like be totally off)

Then at the end where the women never awoke leaves questions which want to be answered, which isn't really important, besides that it was incredible.
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IceyColdone247 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This speaks to me. I have been having these completely weird dreams lately. This was actually one. Not the child part though.
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blooperman12 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Student Writer
Huh. Well, I'm glad you found a connection with it and best of luck to you with the dreams! :iconhuggleplz:
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IceyColdone247 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I hope. They have been pretty weird recently.
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blooperman12 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Student Writer
Well, just be sure to eat something about two hours before you go to bed and get plenty of sleep. They'll go away eventually.
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IceyColdone247 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Um. Alright. Going to be hard with insomnia.
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blooperman12 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Student Writer
awwwww...... I'm sorry. :hug: Well, best of luck to ya.
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:iconiceycoldone247:
IceyColdone247 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Yeah... ^^; Thanks.
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blooperman12 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Student Writer
You know what, Icey....? You're gonna beat it. YOU'RE GONNA BEAT THAT DAMNED INSOMNIA!!!! BEAT IT INTO THE GROUND!!! IURGBAEOISDKLFJALKSD :iconflailplz:
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